I need a grammatically complete sentence?

Before they killed whales for their survival and basic needs, but later on they were killing them for money even though they were harmless.
Anonymous User
Anonymous User
Asked Dec 06, 2012
You've got some pronoun trouble. Five uses of 'they/their/them' is confusing. Which 'them' are you referring to?

Also, you use the word, "Before" to start your sentence. This is confusing because it can sound like you're saying "Before they did this they did this other thing."

This is better:

> Men once killed whales to meet survival and basic needs, but later they killed whales for money even though the whales were harmless.

Notice there's only one pronoun, prefaced clearly by the subject (men). Also notice that it is clearer to use "the whales" twice; if you put "they were harmless" it's unclear who "they" are because you have two subjects - men and whales.
mayagayam
Answered Dec 07, 2012

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